think you have it hard

yo, this is jus a short drop to let u all know no matter how bad you think u may have it
it cant be as bad as me.

aight.

ma dads an alchoholic. ma mum smokes chronic.
my 12 year old sis has a baby in her stomach.
my 14 year old brother is a bender.
and my eighteen year old sis died last december.
i cant remember my life ever being happy.
i fucking hated my life before i even got in nappies.
my beloved aunties dieing from cancer.
back to my sis she got killed by a mitsibushi lancer.

i could go on forever but these are the main things that eat at me.
belive me it all true.. i wish i were lying but unfortunatley i aint.
so whenever u feel down remember this and thank god you aint me.

i have been through alot of shit also man, i think that i know where your comin from in this but i think that it could have been worded alot better than what you worded it as try and put some better vocab in that man

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=136290

return the favor

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.

lol, yeah, I like it. Short and entertaining. Nice little wordplay with the rymes, keep it up

I feel you didnt come real good on this you just rhymed the end words and anyone can do that you have to do something to make your self stand out like develop a personal style.

People out there got it a lot worse than that beleive me.

Rhymes were to simple no real structure or flow. Sorry keep at it. Maybe choose a topic that gets you hyped instead of depressed might turn out better.

dam dude thats bad mayn...good writingz...keep it up...ill PRAY for ya!!!