Letter to my dog *sighs* What I feel at this moment

[Dabatos]

I dont care bout structure, flow, vocab, or any of that shyt cuz i could do that.. just wrote in acouple minutes of what i feel at this moment for my dog


"Letter To My Dog"

I can't stand the feelin of knowin he's sufferin, paralyzed forever
Wish rite now i could be huggin him, that would feel so much better..
Too bad that'll happen never, Wonderin what you doin..
Cuz you an animal dont mean i can't luv you as if you're human..
I'm here drownin in my own tears, lossin you's what i fear,
I'm alone writting why did that fear had to go appear right here..
I hate it, what i feel i cant explain it, i just wish rite now i could change it..
As if it was a book, n jst turn back acouple pages...
So i wouldnt have to see you go away like the way you left..
I completely hate this pain, knowin that you reached your death..
I just lost my breath, let me breathe, its way to hard to believe..
That the dog that i love so much, is gone from the arms of me..
I'm sorry for not bein a good brother, always bein too lazy..
Always walking you late, i just hope that you forgave me..
Your my family, your my brother, even my own baby..
I hope maybe i will see you some day in my dreams.
I hope that one day wut i see isnt really wut it seems...
That it was jst a horrible nightmare n im just asleep..
Sadely its not, i hate this tragedy i got..
Iono why this happenin to me, please help me God..
Atleast, for this one moment, let him understand me..
So i could tell him, that he was part of this family.
I just wish i could speak dog language and I really want to..
So i could say to Inu, My brother, my baby, I really love you..

Dedicated to My Dog Inu..

-Dabatos

P.S. All true.. n he cant sleep at this moment 1:30 am cuz he's in so much pain ya.. im seriously crying rite now

[Dabatos]

uppin.....................

[sILLable]

good emotion and imagery..wack piece though...nice display of emotion...keep elevatin

[Apostle OS]

nah i think your rhyme scheme was good for this peice, if it was on adio i think shitd be kinda hot, and I feel you man, my dog jus fuckin ran away, but its all good, we all in bliss in the end, keep your head up, keep writin -1-

[*Peaches*]

this was very emotional....
seems lik u really have care in your heart for this person and thats cute
good piece... could work on vocab a lil bit more

[Dabatos]

nah i think your rhyme scheme was good for this peice, if it was on adio i think shitd be kinda hot, and I feel you man, my dog jus fuckin ran away, but its all good, we all in bliss in the end, keep your head up, keep writin -1-

thanx fam.. actually it is a audio piece.. imma re-record it sometime... ill be only one verse but w/e.. i could do better lol.. jst didnt care.. i wrote this shyt to feel better n after writting it i felt hella better man... but thanx for the feed n i'll keep my head up fam..

[Dabatos]

uppin........................