RW WK4: Miracle vs Slayerr.

[Bag Mandela]

Regular Battle
Bars due Saturday 16th Nov
Public voting closes Monday
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Overall public vote = 1 vote
MV’s vote = 1 vote
Bags vote = 1 vote
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6 lines each (doesn’t have to be 3 bars with a set up, punch format, you have creative freedom)



Posting explanations / references below your bars is strongly recommended.
Rebuttals, late drops (unless you have a 24hr ext) & no shows are an instant loss.

MV & I will reach a conclusion on bar of the week & the winner will receive $20 to purchase a small quantity of narcotics.

@miracle @Slayerr.

[miracle]

Check

[Slayerr.]

Let’s ave it

[Slayerr.]

Come on man, I’m running outta material

If the archives demise, ur lack of ability will surprises us all, when the mighty fall n u can’t beat a turd
So eat a sweet treat, lemon curdy zest, coz It’ll turn his world backwards n leave him so stressed; he’ll try n eat that word

It’s hard to save the horrible smell of grime with aftershave to mask ur house n it’s a waste of time
Coz you’ll never go on a night out pull a girl who’s pleased u walk her home
So its always preceded by “leave me da fu” when a girl mentions ur cologne

My right alone should leave him in need of medical attention so much he can’t front;
I’ll make this pussy bleed n start calling him tampon n not just because he’s a stuck up cunt


Expo
Leave him backwards and stressed - stressed backwards is desserts

[miracle]

I might need ext til tomorrow

[Slayerr.]

I might need ext til tomorrow

Word as long as you need

[miracle]

Sorry buddy .. busy af lately


With the chrome I’ll ruin ya home.. family mourning, ya mother left sick
If slay ever has his 9 millimeter out… hes probably pissing with his tiny little dick

Ya chicks such a slut.. so many dudes have murdered it
Ask people whos the biggest whore they’ll say slay queen… like gay dudes giving encouragement

Ain’t nothing u can do to win this.. losses follow where ever this man goes
Anything u trial end faster than your subscription to bangbros

[Jack Hallows]

not bad.

Vote - miracle

a lot going on in Slayerr’s verse. felt kinda rushed. very wordy & awkward in parts. the second bar was the best but the set double setup was kinda overkill could’ve been condensed, cuz it kinda took away from the impact of the punch of an otherwise fire concept. i think the oversetup kinda killed the momentum. last bar, eh tampon/pussy has been flipped a few times before so even though it’s a good dig at someone who is objectively a stuck up cunt, it still has less of an impact due to what was stated previously.

miracle had a standard miracle verse for all its worth lol. kinda simple, but consistent. opener was decent. 2nd bar was lol. closer made me laugh too but only cuz it instantly made me think “damn no wonder homes came at the head so aggressively in the $50 cypher” lmaoo. other than that it was an aight punch.

the clash of styles is an interesting dynamic here. someone who has the tendency to over complicate bars vs someone with the tendency to over simplify bars. in the end it’s consistency & polish in this one.

good shit mengs.


Howl.

[MarkB]

If the archives demise, ur lack of ability will surprises us all, when the mighty fall n u can’t beat a turd
So eat a sweet treat, lemon curdy zest, coz It’ll turn his world backwards n leave him so stressed; he’ll try n eat that word
^
I know you was trying to be clever with the backwards line but the punch came across as weak
so too me it lacked impact,also I dont like the usage of the word 'turd' comes over as childish
no punch

It’s hard to save the horrible smell of grime with aftershave to mask ur house n it’s a waste of time
Coz you’ll never go on a night out pull a girl who’s pleased u walk her home
So its always preceded by “leave me da fu” when a girl mentions ur cologne
^
I dont really get this line came off as weak no real punch

My right alone should leave him in need of medical attention so much he can’t front;
I’ll make this pussy bleed n start calling him tampon n not just because he’s a stuck up cunt
^
probally best bar you had, it's played thou

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With the chrome I’ll ruin ya home.. family mourning, ya mother left sick
If slay ever has his 9 millimeter out… hes probably pissing with his tiny little dick
^
weak and the flow was off felt forced

Ya chicks such a slut.. so many dudes have murdered it
Ask people whos the biggest whore they’ll say slay queen… like gay dudes giving encouragement
^
weak, gay jokes not feeling

Ain’t nothing u can do to win this.. losses follow where ever this man goes
Anything u trial end faster than your subscription to bangbros
^
your best bar, it's a shame it's another sex bar but atleast it was set up well

anyway vote miracle

[HEK TEAFY]

I enjoyed the desserts wordplay I felt that was well thought out but in my honest opinion miracles punches were hitting harder....



MVGT=MIRACLE

[Virbius]

Slayerr- I don’t know if there’s a way that desserts bar could’ve been executed without seeming like a reach, but if so this wasn’t it! Cool wordplay concept though. The cologne bar was fire. I’ve heard the tampon joke before, it was decent nevertheless.

Miracle- It was all essentially fine. I’ve heard the 9mm one and the Slay queen one before. Trial/try’ll was new to me but pretty light to be the sole wordplay component of a bar.

Very hard to call. Miracle was more consistent but not the most original. Slayerr was more creative and had bar of the battle, offset by a bad bar and some oddly meandering setups. Honestly I’mma have to go against the trend and vote for Slayerr here as the cologne bar was so good.

[Bag Mandela]

Goddam slayer, that opening bar seemed like someone else wrote it haha the words / bars in reverse stuff is a preference thing I think, some people call it technical, some call it reachy, I don't mind if it's done well. The thing that made it seem a bit below your usual standard, especially as you've been on form recently, is that the theme of the bar is that he's going to get so stressed he comfort eats.
How you go from that to the "Leave me da fu-cologne" bar is wild haha that was nice! Set up was a bit verbose but the wordplay aspect - ill.
Think the closer was somewhere in the middle of the other 2 bars in terms a quality, I've heard people say it before in non-battle contexts but it was alright.

Mira also starting off a little steady, but respect for getting something dropped despite being fucked for time.
How you gonna not drop in the gay bars round then write something that homosexually specific lol slay queen did catch me off guard & was pretty funny tho so 2nd bar was ok, got it 1-1 going into the last bar, although Slayerr.'s second bar was notably sick.
Yeah that closer was nice, I think you edged the last bar slightly.

If judging it per bar I'd have Miracle up 2-1, I was almost tempted to edge it to Slayerr. based on the cologne bar being fire but the first bar was the complete opposite so I'm gonna have to stick with the Miracle getting the W in this. Despite that first bar being what it was, gotta respect taking the risk that it might work. You could probably sell the wordplay to weightwatchers or some shit, don't let the stressed / desserts dream die.

Vote Miracle